Thursday 29 May 2014

FRIDAY FICTIONEERS - INTO THE UNREAL WORLD - MY 100 WORDS BY LINDA PALUND


INTO THE UNREAL WORLD

           “The real world!” Ginny cried.
            “I forgot how beautiful it was,” I sighed.
            “Be careful, girls,” the Master cautioned. “Beauty is in the eye of the beholder.”
            “And the beholder probably bewitched this gateway, too.” I grumbled, kneeling on the paving stones, preparing for the jump.
            The Master made no answer.  He had lost his second sight.  Beholden to the beholder, we paid our ransom in kind, Ginny, her golden hair and I, my perfect teeth. 
            Desperate to escape; we no longer knew what was real or what other traps awaited us.  Together, we hurled ourselves into the unreal world.

This Dabble in FLASH FICTION is from FRIDAY FICTIONEERS courtesy of:


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THE LITTLE BLACK DRESS - it's not what you expect....but I want to know what you think about it.  Thanks!

32 comments:

  1. Ah...magic. Nice use of the prompt. Good luck with your book.

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    1. Thank you and thank you about my book, too!

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  2. Great story. If they will be free, then real or unreal, they should jump!

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    1. Yes, they have to chance. They've already paid enough. Thanks!

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  3. There is real and unreal and can one live in the other? I say, ask a writer!

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    1. True, we certainly live in our own dream worlds...

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  4. Hair and teeth. What a terrible price. There's a lot of suspense here.

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    1. Thank you for noticing the hair and teeth. Ouch!

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  5. hair, teeth.. so creepy. what a dear price to pay. (hate that Patrick 'stole' my comment) :)

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    1. Ah that Patrick, so sneaky. He has all the teeth, by the way...

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  6. The prospect of paying with either is unthinkable. Very scary.

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    1. Thanks, Sandra. I kept my second sight, though.

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  7. This one has me a bit confused. But all I can say is "Jump, Ginny, Jump!"

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    1. I probably didn't write this clearly enough. In too much of a rush. Maybe I'll fix it....

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  8. Dear Lindaura,

    So they jumped hairless and toothless into the unknown. Frighteningly magical.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Yes, they certainly gave a lot only to stand on the brink of the unknown. Thanks!

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  9. Dear Lindaura,

    This reminded me of Heinlein's Glory Road. Have you read it. His wife's name was Ginny and a character like her can be found in many of his stories, including the one I mentioned. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    1. No, I never Glory Road. I read Heinlein when I was a child - during that time I was hiding out in the public library, escaping from Los Angeles. I read all the Sci Fi I could get my hands on, but I never read Glory Road. Should I? Thanks for the tip,
      Lindaura

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  10. Toothless and Hairless, sounds like a great crime fighting duo--or perhaps comedy team. I'm glad they have the courage to leap into the unknown. Now, I must take a peek under that little black dress.

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    1. Yes, you must take a peek! We'll leave toothless and hairless out of it though...

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  11. Too give up your greatest feature to escape . . .

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    1. Interesting dilemma, when you think about it, but many have given far more. Sadly. Like their souls, for instance.

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  12. Oooo good one. Much better than my little graduation ditty.

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    1. Thanks Audrey, but don't run yourself down. I am going to check you out now!

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  13. The beholder demands a high price. I hope they make it safely to the other side, be it real or unreal!

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    1. Aha! so you are the Draliman! How droll of you! Poor things. They paid the price without a guarantee. But like they say, there are no guarantees in this unreal world of ours.

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  14. There is always a price to pay for the unreal... hope the transition is worth for them

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    1. See, when it's unrealistic, it's a lot more expensive! IN my mind, they made it into the other world - real or unreal, they escaped.

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  15. Linda, Good story and well written. I definitely think they should opt for freedom. I'm just left wondering why anyone would want their hair and teeth. That's creepy indeed. :) ---Susan

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    1. I think you give what's most precious to you. The Beholder doesn't need that stuff. It's just taking it 'cause it can!

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  16. Real and unreal - I like how you mixed them up in this curious little tale. Feels like there is so much more to it.

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    1. Reality, what did Einstein say about it? Everything is relative? Oh that's relativity...Reality is in the eye of the beholder in this case.
      thanks!

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