tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post3171027834934732114..comments2023-05-12T09:49:29.749+01:00Comments on FICTION VICTIM: FRIDAY FICTIONEERS - 25 May 2012 - MOTH INVASION - My 100 Words - Sussan De AlluraLinda Palundhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10306701232418627061noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-4702269719671095702012-05-29T16:23:30.730+01:002012-05-29T16:23:30.730+01:00Thank you....I have had some trouble getting to yo...Thank you....I have had some trouble getting to your 100 words... I'll get there. Do I need to join some other blog spot?Sussan de Allurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178433241523509146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-83131854353097998332012-05-29T16:21:58.394+01:002012-05-29T16:21:58.394+01:00Thank you very much. I like your take and that is...Thank you very much. I like your take and that is just my mind was going...asphyxiating! <br /><br />Sussan De AlluraSussan de Allurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178433241523509146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-8331177771351284282012-05-26T18:51:46.035+01:002012-05-26T18:51:46.035+01:00OH my gosh Linda. I hope you did not think I was r...OH my gosh Linda. I hope you did not think I was referring to you as "A bugged kinda gal"! I was referring to the screamer, just in case you wondered. Thanks again and again and again! just a little joke. ;-)<br /><br />Madison, please do not stop commenting. I really appreciate your valuable feedback.<br />Love to all, as well!<br />Sussin.Sussan de Allurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178433241523509146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-52111700260350753842012-05-26T18:46:36.843+01:002012-05-26T18:46:36.843+01:00Absolutely! I agree 100%.
Thanks LindaAbsolutely! I agree 100%.<br />Thanks LindaSussan de Allurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178433241523509146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-30658684853486273582012-05-26T18:28:22.094+01:002012-05-26T18:28:22.094+01:00Sussin, I totally understood where you were going ...Sussin, I totally understood where you were going with the last line and I prefer it as it is.<br />Got to say that the one scream was not enough. I must disagree with Madison.<br />Here is why:<br />If you scream once, you are crying out for help. The second scream means that help has not arrived yet. The third scream means that help is never going to arrive. That was the menace and the horror of the story and why everyone like it so much.<br />There you have it.<br />Love to you all,<br />LindaLinda Palundhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10306701232418627061noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-63308291677733809532012-05-26T18:02:02.229+01:002012-05-26T18:02:02.229+01:00Started so softly and quickly become asphyxiating....Started so softly and quickly become asphyxiating. Well done.<br /><br />Here's mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/flash-fiction-friday-almost/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-13593145190359837382012-05-26T15:30:47.145+01:002012-05-26T15:30:47.145+01:00Chilling...
Here's mine: http://logo-ligi.com...Chilling...<br /><br />Here's mine: http://logo-ligi.com/2012/05/25/mothballs/Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18149363845050477601noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-24971628855404014002012-05-26T05:31:55.305+01:002012-05-26T05:31:55.305+01:00Thank you Madison. Yes, I know what you mean as I...Thank you Madison. Yes, I know what you mean as I troubled over that last line a lot, really a lot! See? If my first person POV (that is where it started) the narrator, if it is so. I have been living with this couple since you first posted the photo prompt! Dang! all I can tell you is that the 1st person or narrator how ever it boils down...(who has a name: Elise) really WOULD scream and scream and scream. so in the end I did not edit nor did my editor friend. She is a very "bugged" kind of gal. Who knows? In 100 words it is even hard for me to say thank you. I do hear what you are saying and I think it is very valid...kept me up a night or two.<br />Thank you, thank you, thank you! <br />(big smile on my face)Sussan de Allurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178433241523509146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-24715249977901892302012-05-26T05:19:16.132+01:002012-05-26T05:19:16.132+01:00Oh I am so sorry! I intended to say that I look f...Oh I am so sorry! I intended to say that I look forward to reading your, as well. I will most certainly make comment. sdmSussan de Allurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178433241523509146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-61520180739745608322012-05-26T05:12:09.214+01:002012-05-26T05:12:09.214+01:00Thanks Rochelle! Yes, there really are Moth invas...Thanks Rochelle! Yes, there really are Moth invasions, no lie! To say that there just might be even WORSE things than that! I really like that you had some fun, and that you likened me in anyway to Alfred Hitchcock..WOW! I Love him!! No kidding!<br /><br />Best of all I love that you got an actual visual...what more could I ask, as this is one goal I aspire to?<br /><br />I really do appreciate your taking the time to read and comment on my post.Sussan de Allurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178433241523509146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-26016453684674527622012-05-26T04:57:52.550+01:002012-05-26T04:57:52.550+01:00That was a surprise ending, with a touch of horror...That was a surprise ending, with a touch of horror Hitchcock style. I think the only thing I'd suggest as far as crit goes would be the last phrase. There's something about 'screamed and screamed and screamed' that just doesn't sound as scary as just ending with "Jacs," I screamed. If you want to add more, add another bit of frantic or panicked dialogue maybe. Overall, it was a very imaginative response to a pretty difficult prompt!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-64063510478589311452012-05-26T04:57:31.675+01:002012-05-26T04:57:31.675+01:00Thank you, Linda!
The real problem here is: I us...Thank you, Linda!<br /><br />The real problem here is: I used to love Horror movies and somewhere along the line I stopped being afraid. Damn!!!<br /><br />Knowing that you most likely appreciate all movies that give you a rush, I am very sorry that MOTHERA ever got on cellulite...<br /><br />oops! My bad...I think that just might not be the word I was looking for. Isn't that the bumpy cottage cheese like stuff hanging off of me everywhere?<br /><br />Good Grief! ;-) xo sSussan de Allurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178433241523509146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-85142934470226093652012-05-26T04:42:51.987+01:002012-05-26T04:42:51.987+01:00Thank you very much AMelodyGalloway!
I love heari...Thank you very much AMelodyGalloway!<br /><br />I love hearing that my stories could supply a surprise or two. I can not wait to read yous!<br /><br />BTW..."clever" geeze, I am blushing! I have always wanted to be clever... Truth!!Sussan de Allurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178433241523509146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-74100341319619638192012-05-26T04:39:39.788+01:002012-05-26T04:39:39.788+01:00Thank you Janet!
I really like that you stopped b...Thank you Janet!<br /><br />I really like that you stopped by for a look and especially appreciate you expressing your little surprise. Gotta tell ya, the hardest part for me is the slicing and dicing it takes to edit my words and thoughts and have any of it make sense from where I started. Sometimes it is hard to let go and move on. If the need or provocation should arise, I assure you the story has a couple or so, lives, that are screaming for expression. ;-)<br /><br />Can't wait to read yous..that will be tomorrow.<br /><br />cheers!Sussan de Allurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178433241523509146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-90051411663090366182012-05-26T04:32:01.489+01:002012-05-26T04:32:01.489+01:00Thank you The Lime,
I very much appreciate that a...Thank you The Lime,<br /><br />I very much appreciate that and I must give credit to my extraordinary editor. ;-)<br /><br />Can't wait to read yours...that will be tomorrow.Sussan de Allurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178433241523509146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-159514497683300612012-05-26T04:29:43.675+01:002012-05-26T04:29:43.675+01:00No kidding, CC! Thanks! Nothing I love better then...No kidding, CC! Thanks! Nothing I love better then evoking nervousness, sadness, pain and sorrow. Oh almost forgot...I love equally the opposite of these.<br /><br />Truly thanks for stopping by for a look and for a "take" on what I am presenting. Can not wait to read and comment on yours as well, come tomorrow.<br /><br />BTW...I am open to ANY comments or critiques! <br /><br />I find this all so very much fun!Sussan de Allurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178433241523509146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-78742027451569694092012-05-26T04:23:14.256+01:002012-05-26T04:23:14.256+01:00Can't wait to read you 100 words! thanks for ...Can't wait to read you 100 words! thanks for checking out my post.<br /><br />Frankly, I am not really sure about very much about moths, last I heard they liked wool and fur...oh my!...and who wouldn't like BigMacs? ;-)Sussan de Allurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178433241523509146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-3954934717896033002012-05-26T04:20:23.980+01:002012-05-26T04:20:23.980+01:00Either? hummmmmm...I will have to get back to you...Either? hummmmmm...I will have to get back to you on that one newpillowbook...<br />Thanks for looking, reading and commenting.<br />sdlSussan de Allurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178433241523509146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-42873382462929110002012-05-26T02:40:02.650+01:002012-05-26T02:40:02.650+01:00I guess the local moths don't like outsiders e...I guess the local moths don't like outsiders either??Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-46702215695343673412012-05-25T21:11:13.483+01:002012-05-25T21:11:13.483+01:00I liked it I wonder if the moths like big macs too...I liked it I wonder if the moths like big macs too. =)<br />here is mine http://yaralwrites.com/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-69834176906791365972012-05-25T20:39:38.739+01:002012-05-25T20:39:38.739+01:00One or two is nice, but when we have things blotti...One or two is nice, but when we have things blotting out the sun, we're at plague level. I'da been nervous too! Creepy! Nice job. <br /><br />My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/chasing-the-divine/C.C. https://www.blogger.com/profile/06070310862785263964noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-23372269600388619842012-05-25T20:35:07.065+01:002012-05-25T20:35:07.065+01:00Fantastic! Aaaaah, moths!
I like the narrator and...Fantastic! Aaaaah, moths!<br /><br />I like the narrator and the natural, matter-of-fact voice. Cool cool cool. It's nice to be back.<br /><br />Mine's here: http://thecolorlime.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/landing-98/The Limehttp://thecolorlime.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-7571086471792449282012-05-25T19:50:36.348+01:002012-05-25T19:50:36.348+01:00Not where I expected the story to go but a nice tw...Not where I expected the story to go but a nice twist. Hope there will be a continuation. Here's mine: http://postcardfiction.com/2012/05/25/despite-your-intentions/Janethttp://postcardfiction.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-55993769141490401002012-05-25T19:47:57.990+01:002012-05-25T19:47:57.990+01:00Nicely handled back story. The invasion of moths ...Nicely handled back story. The invasion of moths was unexpected, very clever. Here's mine: http://melodypearson.com/flash-fiction/may-25-2012-moths/AMelodyPearsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11640330236677427145noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1110273715146844185.post-25722636518666438752012-05-25T14:05:30.679+01:002012-05-25T14:05:30.679+01:00Thanks Carlos!
I just goggled until I found the r...Thanks Carlos!<br /><br />I just goggled until I found the right moths. fascinating stuff that got me sidetracked for quite a while. And Yes, indeed there really are Moth invasions!Sussan de Allurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178433241523509146noreply@blogger.com